Feedback
I got a lot of feedback from various sources, including my friends, family, classmates and teacher.
Quantitative research: Google survey
In a google survey that I created I asked a series of questions related to my film.
I surveyed a group of 4 people, who are both under 18 and over 18, therefore being my target audience.
The group’s answers were majority positive, they said the narrative is easy to follow, the music is suitable and the plot is consistent. When asked the genre of the film, 75% said it would fit into ‘social commentary’ whereas 15% said it would be a ‘crime’. This is good, as my film is a social commentary/drama and therefore it is positive that my audience could recognise this.
Relating to codes, I was told that the film is too dark (but this was due to the projector we used), but that the sound, editing and acting conveyed clear meaning and ‘made the story consistent and immersed the audience in the product’. The lighting otherwise was ‘good mood setting’ and the script was ‘engaging’.
Regarding audience engagement, 75% said they could relate to the situation, and that it reveals ‘it could happen to anyone’ . The audience was engaged by the storyline which is accordingly ‘consistent and engaging’ and all the scenes seemed to fit together.
A verbal conversation between me and my target audience also made me aware of the sound mixing which needed work, and I was told that I should re-edit the texting conversation to make it more believable and engaging.
Overall, I got a large range of extremely positive feedback from the survey, yet also a lot of points that I have used to fix up my production.
Qualitative Research:
Most of the feedback I got from individuals was constructive and comprehensive. After showing the first full draft of the film, my brother pointed out technical issues such as the fact that the audio was too quiet, the voice recording of Lara was unbelievable and the opening sequence was too long. These were easy fixes, yet I also looked to other sources as he was on set with me when we were filming, therefore he had some bias.
I was also told by classmates that the narrative wasn’t clear, as the ending seemed a bit sudden. I changed this by adding in jump-cuts back to the first alleyway scene. After doing that, I was told it made a lot more sense and added a cool stylistic feel.
After speaking with my teacher regarding the first scene of my film, I was told that it wasn’t very clear why the protagonist was following the waitress outside. I changed this by adding in a conversation I had previously cut from the script, where the boys pressure the protagonist to follow her outside. Once I added this, the narrative flowed better.
Critical Friend: In class, we were allocated a ‘critical friend’ which was someone who is not involved in our production process at all. My ‘friend’ filled out a worksheet (see below), which shows that ‘dialogue and music mixing need work’ and that my audience wasn’t clear. He also added that my folio didn’t completely reflect my production.
I asked a friend to help me with audio mixing, and lowered the music so that it was easier to hear the characters. I also added more explanation in my folio and the jump-cuts (as mentioned above) to make clear who my audience is.
Qualitative research: Haezan (brother)
00:14cut at
00:46 too obvious same shot – dance shot
non diegetic to music – music
-maybe do different song to make it flow???
1:03 – needs smoother transition from music to crowd/boys
1:13 cut a little at start (start at sound of lighting cigarette).
1:22cut half second off VERA walking to JK
1:24 test blurring -bring to same level of out of focus as next shot
-Throughout sequence blurring shots try out?
-like Costa coming in and out – audience in his shoes
-1:31 – add some blue/green and blur
1:35 – increase vibrate noise on phone
1:34 – make slightly shorter at start – too much dead air
1:49 too much dead air – make slightly shorter
1:55 he pulls back – cuts to him and hasn’t pulled back
-cut to him lighting cigarette.
-cut from her giving to drinks montage….
-show timeline of him getting more drunk
-then cut to 2:28
jacket at 2:28 – then puts it on again at 2:30
2:28 – 2:32
2:42 – background sound starts too late…
makes more logical sense if theres more time passed since them talking
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sound effect of her running – keep it going
-hold on 3:21 bit longer
3:22 – starts stationary and camera accelerates
-so cut to 3:24ish instead so its constant
-vomit 3:37 make bit longer bc cuts from it in his mouth to nothing
-cover boys singing by Lara saying Dickhead
-cut to 4:23
-stop being such an arrogant shit needs to go higher
-insert one more line at 5:40
cut between red and blue is due to sound
-needs to fade out
5:55 – he starts stationary – shot needs to start on him already walking
-first whispers need to be slightly louder
6:25 needs to be moving at same speed he’s moving – slow it down – ken burns change
drop brightness on wall shots
whispers and music need to climax together MUSIC amps up too
7:09 try make that shot just one and fasten it
7:14 – running shot too long cut to 7:16
7:18 hold a bit longer so audience can get understanding of whats going on
-put in Vera and JK shot one more time – close up of oscar and such
-record man shouting out oy-oy so it makes more sense why oscar ran away
7:37 cut a bit jarring
7:41 increase sound of breathing…? or voice record breathing
7:57-is there a problem here? do when lara looks up
cut to 8:03
hold on JK a little bit longer and fade out slower
Teacher Feedback:
This feedback is focused on my folio quality rather than the actual film. My teacher gave me various pointers that I should consider to change in my folio to make it as best as possible:
-Credit Nina as Assistant Director
-Talk about what I changed in production, and evaluate these changes.
-Add in screenshots of the editing process
-Evaluate the ramifications of not knowing how to use the equipment on set
-Use ‘After-affects’ to create believable text messages on the screen
-Talk about HOW the actors helped each other
-Talk about WHY I used manual focus only
-Evaluate the phone call feedback and relay WHY it’s important
-Juxtapose the ‘Trainspotting’ scene with the original movie
-Explain WHY I altered the vomiting scene
-Justify ALL my choices.
These points of feedback helped me a lot with my final folio, as it rounded off my ideas and built a strong and backed folio.
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